>how about this??

投稿者： SafetyTrap123 投稿日時： 2001/07/14 18:54 投稿番号： [9171 / 203793]

not bad,but....
main story needs more dynamism of dramaturgy, I think.
In this case the dynamism is rhythmical tempo which include tops and bottoms on feeling.
It's important because it constitutes the flow of a tale sensuously.

Comprehensive evaluation: B+

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なぜ韓国人は、嫌われるのか？

>how about this??